Dialogue
Posted by A. T. on Thursday, September 10, 2009
Under: theretard5892
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By theretard5892
Chapter Six: Dialogue
I swear to the god that does not exist, I have explained this SO many times that I think my head might explode.
Here's some shit you need to know about dialogue. LISTEN UP AND LISTEN WELL, BECAUSE THIS DRIVES ME FUCKING INSANE.
Wrong: "Fullmetal, you're short." Said Mustang.
Correct: "Fullmetal, you're short," said Mustang.
If you want to go into details, Ed punched him in the face after that and he was hospitalized.
But that's not the point.
See, the dialogue is PART OF the continuous sentence! 'Said Mustang' is a dependant clause, meaning it can't be a sentence on it's own. It needs the dialogue to be part of it to make it a full sentence. Look in any book you can find (that does not include the bible; apparently, their idea of grammar back then was slightly different than it was a few thousand years in the future. Plus, it was written by monkeys.) and you'll see that I'm telling the truth.
Another thing:
Similes/description/fancy wording is all fine and good...But in dialogue? No. Just...No. No one says "it was a lovely dance and a very eventful night. The roses were blooming so beautifully that they seemed brighter than the moon itself, and my date looked dashing," except really awkward characters. Or Shakespeare.
When writing dialogue, say it out loud. Unless there's someone in the room. They might think you're insane.
If it sounds like shit, you'll be able to tell IMMEDIATELY. So be careful! Or else!
ONE MORE THING!
Dialogue needs to go on separate lines.
"Hello, how are you today?"
"Fine. I hate you."
"That's okay. Good night."
See? But it even has to be like that with description in between.
"Hello, how are you today?" Mustang asked politely, spinning around in his spinny chair thing. Ed gave him a weird look.
"Fine. I hate you."
"That's okay," Mustang said, coming to a stop and standing up, only to bump into a wall and get severe brain damage. "Good night."
It was the middle of the day.
Tada!
I know most of this chapter seems insanely obvious...But I've seen SO many people make these errors that it's almost embarrassing. Please don't embarrass Mird, or you will be banned from reading this fanfic.
Bye for now!
-theretard5892
By theretard5892
Chapter Six: Dialogue
I swear to the god that does not exist, I have explained this SO many times that I think my head might explode.
Here's some shit you need to know about dialogue. LISTEN UP AND LISTEN WELL, BECAUSE THIS DRIVES ME FUCKING INSANE.
Wrong: "Fullmetal, you're short." Said Mustang.
Correct: "Fullmetal, you're short," said Mustang.
If you want to go into details, Ed punched him in the face after that and he was hospitalized.
But that's not the point.
See, the dialogue is PART OF the continuous sentence! 'Said Mustang' is a dependant clause, meaning it can't be a sentence on it's own. It needs the dialogue to be part of it to make it a full sentence. Look in any book you can find (that does not include the bible; apparently, their idea of grammar back then was slightly different than it was a few thousand years in the future. Plus, it was written by monkeys.) and you'll see that I'm telling the truth.
Another thing:
Similes/description/fancy wording is all fine and good...But in dialogue? No. Just...No. No one says "it was a lovely dance and a very eventful night. The roses were blooming so beautifully that they seemed brighter than the moon itself, and my date looked dashing," except really awkward characters. Or Shakespeare.
When writing dialogue, say it out loud. Unless there's someone in the room. They might think you're insane.
If it sounds like shit, you'll be able to tell IMMEDIATELY. So be careful! Or else!
ONE MORE THING!
Dialogue needs to go on separate lines.
"Hello, how are you today?"
"Fine. I hate you."
"That's okay. Good night."
See? But it even has to be like that with description in between.
"Hello, how are you today?" Mustang asked politely, spinning around in his spinny chair thing. Ed gave him a weird look.
"Fine. I hate you."
"That's okay," Mustang said, coming to a stop and standing up, only to bump into a wall and get severe brain damage. "Good night."
It was the middle of the day.
Tada!
I know most of this chapter seems insanely obvious...But I've seen SO many people make these errors that it's almost embarrassing. Please don't embarrass Mird, or you will be banned from reading this fanfic.
Bye for now!
-theretard5892
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